Hope you are doing well! Welcome to our first activity. Please, post your comments before February 27th, 6 p.m.!
1. Go to the web link https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SEukS2YN9B8 and watch the video (it was worked today).
- Introduction: it usually offers something that changes / affects / motivates the characters of the story to overcome a situation.
- Body: it usually reveals how the characters move toward overcoming the situation.
- Conclusion: it has to do with facing one difficult choice and decides one correct option while working out of the situation.
3. Write a paragraph for each one of the parts mentioned above, giving your own ideas to tell your version of the story. It must have 150 words at least.
4. Prepare an oral report about it to be presented in the tutorial sessions (first week of March), you just will have 2 1/2 minutes and it is expected you to say 45 sentences at least.
- Simple sentence structures in the tenses you decide.
4. Language use / writing aspects:
- Simple sentence structures in the tenses you decide.
- Useful vocabulary you need to express your ideas.
- Grammar, spelling, punctuation rules, etc.
All your writings will be welcome as comments... Thanks for participating!
- Grammar, spelling, punctuation rules, etc.
All your writings will be welcome as comments... Thanks for participating!
The Bad Habit Rabbits.
ReplyDeleteIt's a hard thing to walk in the Sin City's streets without fear, this place is a paradise for the worst animals in nature, the rabbits, with their kind and fluffy appearance they are capable of everything.
In this city of evilness, every rabbit had a vice, everything from drugs to snore. There were no limits.
So in this shitty city a smart and handsome rabbit called Cabbage wasn’t an exception because he used to make fall in love some girls just for fun and in one of his search of pleasure at night he found an unexpected situation.
In the top of a building was a mysterious shadow, a kind of pretty bunny was on the border of the edification with no other intention that finishing her life. Cabbage found himself in the moral dilemma of being a hero or to approach the moment for being a jerk and make of the girl other one of his "Prizes" but there wasn't time, he ran so fast that in a few seconds he was next to that depressed girl and with the most gentle words he invited her to get safe and stay away of the border, she with some tears and a sad face accepted the friendly words.
They went down the stairs with the resolution of sharing some Carrot juice and talk about forgetting the sadness but Cabbage didn't know that this was his worst decision of the month (Because he used to take some really bad choices). They went to the Carrot-Shop in the end of the street and talked for some minutes until Thithie, the young and pretty girl with familiar problems that Cabbage helped said him;
-I have a disease and make me feel so bad, it's killing me slowly- She said scared- It's the solitude of my soul, it's the necessity of manly whiskers in my life. Can you be mine? Would you love me?-
Cabbage was mute and fuc*ing surprised he didn't know what to say, he realized that she just wanted to make him fell in love with her, to take control of him, so he just wanted to go away without her desperately and that he did, he ran out of the Carrot-Shop wishing to leave her back in the past.
What a disaster!
He went for the darkest alleys running away from that nightmare girl, thinking how to avoid her, how to flee from this problem but clearly he never thought that she could be searching him at that exact moment. The destiny didn’t help him, she found him really fast and at the top of her voice she demanded him love and company
-I belong to you and you... You belong to me!- She said
-You're fuc*ing insane, you are a manipulative and liar bunny- Replied Cabbage angrily- I will never love you and don't think about being your friend, you have no chance of that... Get out of my face!-
-Hold on... So you never loved me?- She asked him
-Of course I don't.-
It wasn't the Cabbage's intention to hurt her but he can't be so patient with a person without common sense.
Thithie was disappointed with life, once again she didn't find love and her options were limited so she ran to a new hunting season on the top of the building where she was the queen and Cabbage after that night promised himself to never be a hero.
In Sin City the heroes are food.
[Vladimir Franco G]
Worse than I
ReplyDeleteThis is the story of a woman whose life was not what everyone expected, she had studied, but she never wanted to get a job, a good job. She decided to devote her life to something that would give her money and give her fun. She thought to steal through loving deceptions, it would give her everything she needed, and also it did not have a schedule that would harm their plans.
Basically her life became a monotony that apparently she enjoyed. She used an old building catch men through an apparent suicide.
She had to investigate for several days to a man to see if he could be her next victim, but one day she realized she was in love with his prey, that kind man, full of charisma and with the perfect smile, she felt she had to do whatever was necessary to be with him.
But when she spoke to him, she realized something was wrong, that all the good she looked at him, kept something evil, he was married but this was not any marriage, it was in a gay couple, and they were murderers hired. she was disappointed by what had happened , it had been too much in so little time. Then she saw that she had already wasted enough time with him, then she returned to her reality in that old building, in that moment thought that this was not the life she wanted but it was the only life that she knew.
but she remembered that she had a title and that could change your life dramatically , and she did.
HI LUISA, I MADE THESE CORRECTIONS
DeleteLine 1. P. m: …expected, she…
c: …expected. She…
Line 4. P. M: … apparent suicide.
C: to use period, not new paragraph.
Line 5. X. M: She had to investigate for several days…
C: She had to investigate several days…
Line 5. M. M: but one day she realized she was…
C: but one day se realized it and she was…
Line 6. X M: …with the perfect smile…
C: …with perfect smile…
Line 6. P. M: …to be with him.
C: …to be with him. But when she spoke…
Line 8. P. M: …murderers hired, she was…
C: …murderers hired. She was…
Line 11. WW. M: … could change your life…
C: … could change her life…
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DeleteHELEN
Delete‘ -If I die, who will care? - There is someone who loves me? –I don’t have another option, I don’t want to continue with this pain’. These were the thoughts that Helen had in her mind while she was on the top of a long building in New York. She wanted to kill herself trying to end her problems... When Helen was about to jump, she let fall her shoe and this hit the head of a passerby, ¡Oh my God! She went down quickly to help the man she had beaten.
When she arrived the man just had a small stroke, but Helen was feeling guilty, so she invited him to take a coffee. They expended a lot of time talking about themselves and the man did not take long to fall in love with Helen, he told her about his feeling, but she just laughed at him and did not say a word, then the man became really angry and decided to go to the police and report her for attempted murder but when Helen realized what the man wanted to do she ran fast and did not look back.
The man ran behind her and he shouted: Catch her! She tried to kill me! But when he reached he saw an ambulance taking her away, apparently she was a patient with bipolar disorder who had escaped.
Line 5 WF. M: to take a coffee C:to drink a coffee
DeleteLine 9 WF. M:when he reached C:when he reached her
Be careful with the description in general. Sometimes it is difficult to understand your point.
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ReplyDeleteTHAT WAS A DREAM
ReplyDeleteThe good looking colonel Aureliano Buendia. He was sat down in the porch of his house…
And he wanted a coffee because the morning was so cold. But, he did not want to drive. He was walking by 24 Linkon street. He was close to the coffee shop. Suddenly, a patent leather shoe rubbed his nose. He looked up and he saw a young woman on the flat roof. He ran up to the flat roof before she fell down. Buendia caught her by her shirt. The terrified young woman embraced him with a shout.
Scared, he thought that a coffee might calm them. They were at Macondo’s coffee shop and an awkward silence was there. She broke the silence and she kissed Aureliano’s hand. He became pissed and he retired his hand. A yellow butterfly settled in the cup of coffee. Unexpectedly, she got up to kiss Buendia. The colonel did not let her to do it and he left Macondo´s coffee so mad.
She got crazy and she followed him until she hugged him. Aureliano desperately pushed her and she fell down unconscious. And then, he ran until a yellow butterfly settled on his hand. The Colonel looked up and the rain was falling down. He ran to the flat roof and he let down one of his shoes and he jumped off the cliff without thinking about it…
When Gabo woke up he was sweating…
Lorena Rodríguez.
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DeleteLine 2 WF. M:He wanted a coffee C:He wanted to drink a cup of coffee
DeleteLine 2 P. M:. But, C: but
Line 2 WF. M:He was close C:He was closed
Line 3 WF. M:the flat roof C:the flat's roof
Line 4 WF. M:by her shirt C:by her blouse
Be careful with the description in general. Sometimes it is difficult to understand your point.
DO NOT YOU KNOW?
ReplyDeleteThere was a man who walked from his house when suddenly a shoe knocks him very strong. The knock was so strong that the man was unconscious for some seconds. He looks up and he noted that in the top of the building there was a beautiful girl who wanted to jump. He runs and climbed the stairs as fast as he could. When he saw her, he fell in love immediately. He tried to persuade her to do not jump. But she just cried and said that life does not have sense. After they talk, he finally got to persuade her. He proposed her to go out. She accepted. They walked down the stairs while he invited her to take lunch and talk about what happened. She was agree. They went to a nearby restaurant.
They start to talk. She said that had so many problems in her life and she is very tired to be alone. The man was impressed because it is not a bid reason to jump from a building. However, he was happy to have rescued a girl from that horrible ending. He thought that if he made pass a good day to this girl maybe she will forget those suicide ideas. So he asked her if she wanted go out and make something different. She was absolutely agree. First he invited her to go to a movie. Then they went to an amusement park. During those moments he and she had a wonderful connection.
They passed a really good day .The man cannot stand the urge to ask her if he wanted to be his girlfriend. Unhesitatingly and with a face of satisfaction the girl said yes. When they were walking down the street another shoe knocks a man who was in front of them. In the top of the building another girls was trying to jump. The surprised man told the girl that it was a coincidence finds those two cases the same day. The girl looked at him and said: how? Do not you know? It is the new fashion,try to find the love of your life as you try to kill himself.
(By Alejandra Buitrago Rojas)
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DeleteHi Alejandra, I made some corrections from your text.
DeleteLine 1 WT. M:A shoe knocks him C:A shoe knocked him
Line 1 WW. M:The man was inconscious C:The man became inconscious
Line 2 WT. M:He looks up C:He looked up
Line 2 WT. M:He runs C:He ran
Line 5 WF. M:She was agree C:She agreed
Line 6 WT. M:She is very tired C:She was very tired
Line 6 WF. M:To be alone C:Of being alone
Line 6 SP. M:bid C:Big
Line 8 M. M:Wanted go C:Wanted to go
Line 9 WF. M:She was absolutely agree C:She absolutely agreed
Line 12 WT. M:Another shoe knocks a man C:Another shoe knocked a man
Line 13 WW. M:Girls C:girl
Nice story!
MARCELA GUEVARA
ENGLISH IV
WOULD YOU LIKE TO BE A HERO?
ReplyDeleteIn a sunny day, a young and handsome man was walking through the street, while an ugly girl was planning how to cath her new victim. So, slowly, a shoe fell from the sky. The shoe was in front of him and he picked it up and his bet ca me grey. Immediatly, he saw to the upper part of a building and there she was ready to jump.
Eric, the man, started to up the stairs, and only in one minute, he was at the same level of Betty. He did not want to be a hero, but either wanted to see blood on everywhere. Eric held his hand to the girl and she was safe and crying.
A cafeteria was the place where they spoke, and Betty started to flirt to him. Eric was married and faithful, and the girl was not beautiful at all.she tried to kiss him but he showed her his compromise ring.
Eric left her behind and went to his house but she was following him like a crazy and obsesive girl. Eric tried to be polite, but he was not so patient.
Betty felt sad and needed. So she ran to the building again. There she was like an eagle, and another young and handsome man picked up the shoe, and thes story started
again.
Hi.
DeleteSome corrections.
* Line 1: P. Mistake: through the street, while an ugly girl...
Correction: through the street. While, an ugly girl..
* Line 2: SP. Mistake: how to cath her new victim.
Correction: how to catch her new victim.
* Line 2: WW. Mistake: So, slowly, a shoe fell from the sky.
Correction: And, however or then, slowly, a shoe fell from the sky.
* Line 2 - 3: RW. Mistake: and his bet came grey.
Correction: no grammatical sense.
* Line 4: X and P. Mistake: Eric, the man, started to up the stairs.
Correction: Eric started to up the stairs.
* Line 5: X. Mistake: but either wanted to see blood on everywhere.
Correction: but either wanted to see blood everywhere.
*'Line 6: WW. Mistake: and Betty started to flirt to him.
Correction: and Betty started to flirt at him.
* Line 7: SP - M. Mistake: was not beautiful at all. she tried to kiss him but he showed her his compromise ring.
Correction: was not beautiful at all. She tried to kiss him but he showed at her his compromise ring.
* Line 8: P. Mistake: Eric left her behind and went to his house but she was following...
Correction: Eric left her behind and went to his house. But, she was following...
* Line 9: WW. Mistake: but he was not so patient.
Correction: but he was not too patient.
* Line 10: P. Mistake: Betty felt sad and needed. So she ran to the building again.
Correction: Betty sad and needed. So, she ran to the building again.
* Line 11: SP. Mistake: and thes story started again.
Correction: and the story started again.
Thanks,
Lorena Rodríguez.
Love and death
ReplyDeleteCan you love after someone has passed away, love and share your life with someone is complicated, is the most powerful feeling, Claire was a young woman, she was married, and she was the owner of a famous coffee shop, everything was good, but someday her husband died in his work, and for Claire was difficult continue mentally sane after his lovely husband died, her entire world changed in a bad way, he had been a good man and without him she was very sad and lonely, after some time she tried to find somebody else but she found bad companies, bad men whose wanted just her money and the coffee shop.
So Claire become lonely, heartless, and kind of evil with the men in general, so one Sunday she had enough and idealized a grim plan, she would kill every man who dare to pass in front her shop, pulling them from the top of the shop, so she went to the top of the shop, and waited for her first victim.
Paul was a very handsome man, he was married, honest, he had a great sense of humor, and a big heart, he habitually worked hard in the week, and helped to feed poor people in the church on weekend, after he walked home and passed the rest of Sunday with his family, but today he suddenly watched a kind of suicide-woman who was on the top of the building throwing her shoes and about to jump so he ran quickly by the interior stairs and went to the top of the building to stop the intentions of the mysterious woman.
Claire watched a lonely man walking down the street and launched her grim plan along with her shoe; she was on the edge of the building pretending a suicide to call the attention of the man and it worked he went to the top too, once he was near to her, She embraced him and tried to kiss him to push him off the edge but when she saw that he had a good heart and that he was a good man and a married man, she reminded her dead husband, her antique life her sadness, she forgot her grim plan but she could not handle this, so she said good bye to paul and she jumped to the void and died.
Hello.
DeleteSome corrections.
Line 4. P. M:she tried to find somebody else but she found bad companies...
C:she tried to find somebody else, but she found bad companies...
Line 5. WW. M:whose wanted just her money and the coffee shop.
C:whose wanted just her money and her coffee shop.
Line 9. P. M:he was married, honest, he had a great sense of humor, and a big heart, he habitually worked...
C:he was married, honest, he had a great sense of humor, and a big heart; he habitually worked...
Line 11. P. M:suddenly watched a kind of suicide-woman who was on the top...
C:suddenly watched a kind of suicide-woman, who was on the top...
Line 11. P. M:throwing her shoes and about to jump so he ran quickly...
C:throwing her shoes and about to jump, so he ran quickly...
Line 15. P. M:kiss him to push him off the edge but when she saw...
C:kiss him to push him off the edge, but when she saw...
Thanks.
Nice story.
Stupid John
ReplyDeleteOnce upon a time there was a man, his name was John. He was just a boy. everything that he did come wrong and he wanted to make one thing right, suddenly an opportunity fell in front of him...
She was Rose a tender woman. She wanted to fall in love with a guy, but she was clumsy and always she was ending with her heart broken. This day she tripped clumsily in from of John.
A few minutes later John and Rose were having a coffee together, while they were speaking about the things that made possible to be know. With the time Rose started to fall in love of John, because their life stories were similar, but she thought that it was similar to other love stories that she had lived.
After of some months they became good friends, they were speaking daily.
They were one for other one, but the problem was that John had a girlfriend and John thought that Rose only wanted his friendship...
One day Rose left a letter in John's house. Rose said him, that she loves him. she decided to say him because was time to start a new life without him.
John lost a good opportunity again...
Andrés Giovanny Blanco Martinez.
Hi Andrés, I have some corrections for your text:
DeleteLine 1: WW. M: ...and he wanted to make... C: ...and he wanted to do…
Line 4: WW. M: ...she tripped clumsily in from of John. C: ...she tripped clumsily in front of John.
Line 5: P. M: A few minutes later John… C: A few minutes later, John…
Line 5: P. M: ...a coffee together, while… C: ...a coffee together while…
Line 6: P. M: ...to fall in love of John… C: ...to fall in love with John…
Line 6: P. M: ... to fall in love of John, because… C: ... to fall in love of John because
Line 8: X. M: After of some months... C: After some months…
Line 9: RW. M: They were one for other one.... C: They were made for each other
Line 10: WW. M: Rose said him… C: Rose told him…
Line 10: WW. M: She decided to say him… C: She decided to tell him...
Line 10: M. M: ...to say him because was time to… C: ...to say him because It was time to...
MARIA THE NEEDED
ReplyDeleteHave you ever heard the story of Romeo and Juliet? Well, this isn’t that one. It’s well-known that girls are always dreaming about get married, bearded men, beautiful kitchen, and things like that. What I will introduce you is a story about a girl in love. And I know everyone loves in a different way.
Tom is a married man; he goes every weekend for playing football with his friends. He’s an engineer, he also plays the guitar, and he’s an excellent cook. He’s the scorer of his team, and girls love him, but one in special; she watches him every match, and she’s in love with him. Tom ignores he’s in marriage and he flirts with her. All he wants is just have fun with his fan, makes love hardly, and drinks a lot of wine every night at her home. Maria took Jack’s phone and views some messages from Jack’s wife, she was lost, her world was falling down, she couldn´t believe what she was seeing. She didn’t want to live one second more; she went to the top floor of a building and she was decided to die, but Jack was walking down and he saw fall down her shoe when she tried to jump.
Finally, he tried to talk her, they went to a bakery and drunk a cup of coffee each one, jack told her that this situation couldn’t happen again, and he decided to put end to this romance. Maria finally found a young man and they get married. Jack is living happy with his wife and three child.
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DeleteLine 1: M: always dreaming about get married, bearded men, beautiful kitchen, and things like that. C: Always dreaming of getting married, men with beards, and a beautiful kitchen.
DeleteLine 5 and 6: WF: Tom ignores he’s in marriage and he flirts with her. C:Tom ignores that he is married and he starts to flirt with her.
Line 6: WW: All he wants is just have fun with his fan, makes love hardly, and drinks a lot of wine every night at her home. C: All he wants is to have fun with his fans, make passionate love, and drink wine with her every night.
Line 8: WT: she was decided to die. C: She was deciding to die/ She decided to die.
Line 9: WO: he saw fall down her shoe when she tried to jump. C:he saw her shoe fall down as she was about to jump.
Line 10: M: he tried to talk her. C: he tried to talk to her.
Line 10: WT: drunk a cup of coffee. C: drank a cup of coffee.
Line 10: M: drunk a cup of coffee each one C: Drank a cup of coffee with each other.
Line 11: EW: he decided to put end to this romance. C: He decided to end.
Line 11: WW: Jack is living happy with his wife and three child. C: Jack is living happily with his wife and three children.
Note: When you write something, either a comment or an important text you should never do contractions
DANGEROUS CIRCLE OF FRIENDS
ReplyDeleteIt was a normal day to Cristy. This night she met a special woman in a bar. They became close friends. She talked about her biggest dreams, mistakes and goals. Bonny the friendly girl gave her a little bit of her heart. Cristy inmediatly fell in love because when her family disappears Bonny was here. The perfect girl in Cristy’s mind.
The days and nights passed and everything seems like lovely story. Cristy began to show what she was: possessive and obsessed. The friendship broke down. Bonny was tired of Cristy, she moves her away.
Cristy began to attract Bonny’s attention. She killed her cat, she hurt her body and finally murdered her brother. But Bonny didn’t find it like something serious and she ignored her. Cristy’s goal was show shame. When Cristy saw that her friend Bonny was far away from her heart she decided to search another friend.
Natalia Pulido Balaguera
Line 1: WW. Mistake: It was a normal day TO Cristy.
DeleteCorrection: It was a normal day FOR Cristy.
Line 1: WW. Mistake: THIS night she met a special woman in a bar.
Correction: AT night, she met a special woman in a bar.
Line 1: M: Mistake: She talked _ about her biggest dreams.
Correction: She talked HER about her biggest dreams.
Line 2: SP: Mistake: INMEDIATLY.
Correction: IMMEDIATLY.
Line 3: M: Mistake: The perfect girl in Cristy's mind.
Correction: She was the perfect girl in Cristy's mind.
Line 3: WW: Mistake: Bonny was HERE.
Correction: Bonny was THERE.
Line 4: X, P, WW, M, WW: THE days and nights passed and everything SEEMS like LOVELY story.
Correction: Days and nights passed, and everything looked like a love story.
Hi Eduardo here are my corrections!
ReplyDeleteLine1.M.M:One day.C:One-day.
Line2.SP.M:attrack.C:attract.
Line3.P.M:friend Mary who was.C:friend Mary, who was.
Line7.WO.M:Said Harry to her.C:Harry said to her.
Line9.P.M:building he saw.C:building, he saw.
Line10.SP.M:hitting an scaring.C:hitting and scaring.
Line13.WO.M:said Harry.C:Harry said.
Line17.SP.M:disscussion.C:discussion.
Line20.SP.M:are you craz.C:are you crazy.
Line23.SP.M:apartament.C:apartment.
Line28.WO.M:said Harry scared.C:Harry said scared.
Line32.WO.M:said Mary displeased.C:Mary said displeased.
Line33.WO.M:said Harry scared.C:Harry said scared.
Line36.WO.M:said Mary hitting.C:Mary said hitting.
Line42.SP.M:becuase.C:because.
Juan Felipe Medrano